About Vanishment

I’m trying out a new (for me) form here for this week’s P/SU Scribble. Invented by fellow poet Candace Kubinec, It’s called a Waltmarie. I don’t know where the name came from, but the rules are these:

>> 10 lines
>> Even lines are two syllables in length, odd lines are longer (but no specific syllable count)
>> Even lines make their own mini-poem if read separately
>> No other rules for subject or rhymes.

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About Vanishment

Everyone you know or will know is
always
going where you may not follow. They
travel
unaccompanied by friends who care,
alone.
We may spy them, standing in the
distance
but they are gone forever. Nothing else
matters.

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Poets And Storytellers United
Weekly Scribble #58
~ Two Into One Will Go ~
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poets and storytell

9 thoughts on “About Vanishment

  1. Far too many making that journey before their time. It makes it even more important to be kind when we encounter them on our path.

  2. So many of my friends have taken the journey I’m beginning to feel like last woman standing. Great write, Ron!

  3. The vanishment has already begun, Ron, and you captured the combination of fear and wonder in your Waltmarie. Fear that someone has to be the last man/woman standing, wonder that you’re the one. The underlying message in the two-syllable lines is interesting advice that I had to think about.

  4. Love the “we may spy them” line – and yes… we care and sometimes our heart is ripped out not being able to go with them. But consolation if one believes we will join them someday. Well penned. I read it three times.

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